Thanks for the comment. Yeah I think David's head in the last panel should be a bit smaller now. I had a hard time trying to get the right size for everyone to fit in, sketching over and over. The last panel btw takes place in front of a computer desk.
1) Hurrah for the quest to be a better Christian! I like the values of the protagonist! Of course God delights in using christians of all levels to share the gospel, but we shouldn't stay child like.
2) Content/ clutterwise the last frame works fine. But because positionally the protagonist is (somewhat) facing his friends, his head should be smaller than his friend's.
3) I get the gist of what the friend is saying in the last frame, but it needs to be reworded.
4) I agree that the walls should be shaded in frames 2,3 & 4 but I think a medium that has little or no texture lines would be less distracting.
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1) Hurrah for the quest to be a better Christian! I like the values of the protagonist! Of course God delights in using christians of all levels to share the gospel, but we shouldn't stay child like.
2) Content/ clutterwise the last frame works fine. But because positionally the protagonist is (somewhat) facing his friends, his head should be smaller than his friend's.
3) I get the gist of what the friend is saying in the last frame, but it needs to be reworded.
4) I agree that the walls should be shaded in frames 2,3 & 4 but I think a medium that has little or no texture lines would be less distracting.