The five strips flow well from one panel to the next. The characters have personality and the strip has a whimsical humor (Man that is one ugly fountain. Heh). The strip has a nice clarity, it’s not too crowded and it’s easy to tell what’s happening.
Too take this ‘to the next level,’ I think you want to give this strip a purpose or theme that reaches a resolution or realization in the last frame. Even whimsical series (like Loony tunes) become funny after you link into the character’s difficulty, which is moved forward a step by the end of the strip. If the problem is King Saul being duped by David, then the last frame should have a resolution or imminent resolution: something like David escapes… or King Saul finally comes to a realization…or they reach a compromise. A master cartoonist like Gary Larson(the Farside) could put both the problem and its impending conclusion in one frame. Google him for another reason as well, I think you will find his drawing style very similar to your own.
Keep working on your craft as you work on your walk with Jesus.
This is one of five cartoons that are suppose to run in a strip but anyways. This is where King Saul is trying to kill David. I thought I would make it a little funny. Feedback it very much welcomed, these were done back in March of this year.
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Thank you Brien for your advice. I definitely will look into Gary Larson and his work.
Hey Brian R,
The five strips flow well from one panel to the next. The characters have personality and the strip has a whimsical humor (Man that is one ugly fountain. Heh). The strip has a nice clarity, it’s not too crowded and it’s easy to tell what’s happening.
Too take this ‘to the next level,’ I think you want to give this strip a purpose or theme that reaches a resolution or realization in the last frame. Even whimsical series (like Loony tunes) become funny after you link into the character’s difficulty, which is moved forward a step by the end of the strip. If the problem is King Saul being duped by David, then the last frame should have a resolution or imminent resolution: something like David escapes… or King Saul finally comes to a realization…or they reach a compromise. A master cartoonist like Gary Larson(the Farside) could put both the problem and its impending conclusion in one frame. Google him for another reason as well, I think you will find his drawing style very similar to your own.
Keep working on your craft as you work on your walk with Jesus.
This is one of five cartoons that are suppose to run in a strip but anyways. This is where King Saul is trying to kill David. I thought I would make it a little funny. Feedback it very much welcomed, these were done back in March of this year.