There a lot to like about this page, and I love the premise. As a rule I like to start with a couple of pages that visually hook the readers emotions before moving the plot forward with a lot of verbiage. And since the stories we tell center around a character I would really like to like the reader in with that character. For example, as our priest enters the prison you could show him experiencing pangs of extreme depression or apprehension...or hope. You're already using environment in this pic, but you'll want to punch up the first couple of pages emotionally...then bring in a page like this which moves the plot forward.
I like the concept and the art style. The warden looks really cool. The dialogue is natural. The chaplain's anatomy is a little wonky in the first frame, but's it's not terribly off. I like the door opening; it's a good intro. Maybe break up the spartan style with some more color and detail every few pages. I do kind of like the simple grey scheme, though.
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We just finished the book and have it in local stores, but are also selling it on Etsy here. Hoping to get it on Comixology in the future.
hey is there more of this?? great premise, great character designs.
There a lot to like about this page, and I love the premise. As a rule I like to start with a couple of pages that visually hook the readers emotions before moving the plot forward with a lot of verbiage. And since the stories we tell center around a character I would really like to like the reader in with that character. For example, as our priest enters the prison you could show him experiencing pangs of extreme depression or apprehension...or hope. You're already using environment in this pic, but you'll want to punch up the first couple of pages emotionally...then bring in a page like this which moves the plot forward.
God bless your creative efforts.
great composition brother!