We write the stories that the whole world reads! OR we hope to write them!
The Family Man
Hi, everybody:I had an idea for a story that runs along the lines of Nicholas Cage's movie 'The Family Man', which had the hero of the movie have a chance to see his life as it might have been if he had made other choices. I wanted to get a Christian perspective on the idea. Any thoughts? Thanks and God Bless.
Read more…
Comments
Hey Josue,
Thanks for sharing your work! I'll preface this by saying that I'm new to scripting as well, and trying to learn the ropes as I work on my first comic. Here's a few general thoughts on the script:
(1) Overall I think you're off to a good start. I think your scripting format works well, and you give good information in your panel descriptions.I'm interested in what's going on, and where you're taking the characters.
(2) In terms of the dialogue, I would suggest maybe breaking up some of the characters' speaking parts. I think some places you may want to consider doing this is with the kid's words in panel 2 of the first page, and some of Derek and Bret's speaking parts.
(3) Make sure to edit the scripts for spelling and grammatical errors. Aside from the few spelling and punctuation issues, It seems like the word "not" may be missing from the panel 5 description on page 1 (i.e., should it read "trying not to get dragged by the monster?").
Just a few thoughts. God's blessings on your comic, and I hope this helps.
P.S. I find this very helpful when working on my scripts. I'm sure you will as well:
http://www.comixtribe.com/category/the-proving-grounds/
Hello to you all, I have joined the writers group hoping to share and commune with other Christian writers. That sounds a little stiff. It is not meaning to be.
Hello everyone,
I just joined the group, and I look forward to connecting with folks sharing information/ideas about projects, as well the writing process. I'm new to this writing thing, so I'm looking for a solid support network.
I'm currently working on two projects, one focuses on teenagers with unique abilities (Lightweightz), and the other is a collaboration with Earnest Graham (priest and graphic novelist) about the life of the Apostle Peter.
You can learn more about the projects here: www.rsquaredcomicz.com. Take care and God bless!
FaithStar is looking for writers, Who can write superhero style comics with a VERY STRONG religous component.
If interested email: submissions@faithstarnation.com
www.faithstarnation.com