Dan Lee and Brien Sparling, this is for you.
This was the interim art project I was mentioning. The title was just a working title, but I really couldn't think of a better one. I just did the 4 pages of the original idea, didn't want to get bogged down in back story and such. Deliver the sizzle as it were. I also took a crack at dialog, mainly just to get a feel for putting in word bubbles and framing. i wrote the dialog, and I want to state for the record I never set out to be a writer and have no formal training in writing outside elementary school grammar.
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I was just looking back over this series of pics; What an eye-popping last pic! Great composition over all! Mawr!!
I got caught up in the story and didn't realize you had posted it again without the words. I have some minor critiques, but overall good start.
Your protestations that you're not a writer will be dually noted and filed with all the other greats that, because they couldn't find others to team with(for a multitude of reasons) were forced to eventually master every part of the comic process themselves.
Frame by frame, this story has really good pacing! You have a great sense of guiding two different groups and plotlines into one glorious collision; sweet! In four pages you have already created two characters that I want to know more about. This is a story worth developing.